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As is vividly demonstrated in the drawing above, a variety of cultures, such as science, nature, religion, costume, geography and the like, are cooked together. There is a topic under the illustration, which says 'the cuisine of culture is not only delicious but nutritious. TShe cartoon gives an episode of the effect of interaction among diverse culture. As the pace of globalization of economy and commerce, the role which culture plays stands out. For one thing, the integration provides a platform for us to enrich our knowledge and broaden our horizon, which, to varying degrees, bridges the enormous gap between dream and reality. For another, although that outside culture flows in brought some detrimental information, the integration of culture makes impossible the opportunity to experience colorful world. By comparison, if we are confined and exclude everything without giving any consideration to its merits, chances are that we are doomed to lag behind the world and more likely it is that we are subject to the risk of perish. It is no exaggeration to say that the integration of culture exerts so tremendous influence on our life that it is not only a living proof whether we lead a right road and is associated with whether we will fulfil our destiny. Undoutly, the more advanced culture you learn, the more likely it is that you will achieve great accomplishment. How magnificent our life would be did we master all that is beneficial and powerful intellect and culture.