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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11365
要求:

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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熟练使用了一些长难句;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;作者平时练习中应扩充词汇量,注意几处拼写错误。

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As we can see from the picture that people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see,that's show me the truth:overusing cell phones has becoming popular in people's daily life. The depressing results of the overusing cell phones are obvious.To begin with,now many people more and more relying on moblie phones.For example,they are perfer to send messages to their friends than talking in face-to-face,as a result of that,human relationships will be not close as before and human's communicate skills will decrease.Furthermore,overusing cell phones has become an important factor that people's eye sights are demaged.It is have a bad effect on people's health. In belief,cell phone just a communcate tool in people's daily life,people shouldn't over depend on it ,and it will be very useful for human's development if we use it in a sensible way.

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