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June 23th, 2008 Dear sir, My name is liming,who is 18 years,is a student. The news where from local newspaper I hear. I apply for the position of volunteer in BeiJin Olmpics.Not only like help each other,but also have a keen interest in PE. I have a good command of english. I would appliciate if I contribute to country. Thank you for your consideration . You sincerely Li Ming