采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;可适当增加文中长句和复杂句的使用;拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;请注意分段。
In recent years, most people pay their particular attention on studying English to connect internationalization. English becomes more and more important at school, especially when you want to look for a great job which also is required to get related licenses. But in the long term, the society seems to neglect Chinese learning. It would cause some problem like student's composition and expression skill become worst.