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As we all know, the scenery of Guilin is best of the world. It's no doupt that Guilin is the most beautiful City of China. So, I will take my foreign friend to visit to Guilin if he came here. Li Jiang river is an interestingplace of Guilin. Many mountains arround the river, so we can have a boat on the river and see the beautiful scenery. Wind kiss our face and we just have a kiss to the natrue. Nest, I'd like to take my friend to the West Stree of Guilin. There is many interesting things selling by the people. We can find anything what we know, and we can also find what we haven't saw. I think my foreign friend will like this place, and so I am.
