小学二年级英语作文:Our house

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my name is : HaiYang Jin. my name is Alan. my Family have my Father and I. my mother and sister.and my brother.my Family play: phone and ipad and computer and Go to the park and Look TV. and eat : Rice and Bread and sandwich and apple pie and Pumpkin pie and cake and Noodles My Family Drink Water and Fruit juice.