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To learn English is for future having a better life primarily. My family is agricultural primarily.Because of our village is a low-lying place. A flood swept cross in the last year, autumn. We have lost resources, even unable to know it. More than 100 people were homeless and were hurt. Over 20 people drowned by the accident. John dropped a piece of paper from the window down to his mother who was in the downstairs. She felt a sudden sense of nervous, of desperation. We might have to face the truth about the problems of ecological disaster, caused when we destroy it.