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is music the key to success? it has long been a contantious issue as to whether music is the key to success? some people are of the opinion that music is the key to success while others point out that music is not a good way to success. as far as i am concerned, the former opinion holds more weight. for one thing,in my eyes, music is just an entertainment for piblic,and it's build on the fact that people have enough money and time to enjoy. to such an extent, music is depend on the demand of public. in our material world, people pay more attention to how to earn money than care about music's developing after all. for another, on the one hand, the industry of music is limited, on the other hand, there are many people pour into the industry every year.ii means that, for a person who want to success in this way, how he can outstand in the filed,which full of excellent people. it's difficult to make his own works famous without many conditions. music to success is not easy. as is disscussed aboved, it is not difficulty to draw the conclusion that music is not the key to success.therefore, as a university, we should choose another flesible way to success.
