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字数：300 满分：100分
拼写很棒，可适当增加学术词汇的使用；可适当增加从句和复杂句使用；行文稍欠流畅，应适当增加连接词的使用。
Is music the key to success? It has long been a contentious issue as to whether music is the key to success? Some people are of the opinion that music is the key to success while others point out that music is not a good way to success. As far as I am concerned, the former opinion holds more weight. For one thing, in my eyes, music is just an entertainment for public, and it's built on the fact that people have enough money and time to appreciate. To such an extent, music depends on the demand of the public. In our material world, people pay more attention to how to earn money than care about music's developing after all. For another, on the one hand, the industry of music is limited, on the other hand, there are many persons specialize in the job every year. It means that, for a person who wants to success in this way, how he can outstand in the filed, which full of excellent people? It's difficulty to make his own works famous without many conditions. Music to success is not easy. As is discussed above, it is not difficulty in draw the conclusion that music is not the key to success. Therefore, as a university, we should choose another feasible way to success.
