语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者句法基础较为扎实;拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;请注意分段。
Living in an age when the adolescents are lack of the necessary guidance and supervision,we can never fail to figure out the fact that teenagers are become especially self-conscious. Under this circumstance,the youngsters are more likely to believe in what they have listened or seen instead of thinking twice before drawing their conclusions,which is pathetically and undoubtedly considered controversial or even unreasonable.
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