文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;衔接成分偏少;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend,his name is Jack,10 years old now.He has brown hairs and dark brown eyes.He comes from USA,his family has a big farm.he likes to play basketball,football.In my mind he is a good boy ,he always help me learn english,help other students clean class room.we very like him in our class.