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I have a good friend,his name is Jack,10 years old now.He was born in USA and come to china study chinese.He has brown hairs and dark brown eyes.his family has a big farm which for feed many sheep.He likes to play basketball,football.In my mind he is a good boy,he helps me learn english and help other students clean class room.We like him very much in our class.