作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少。
Smoking It’s almost known to all that smoking is bad for people’s health. The harm of smoking is that could be ill, for example, heart disease, cancer, lung disease and so on. 2.5 million died of smoking each year in the world. They known the harm of smoking. But they can not control themselves. These reasons include two elements. One, the habit. A lot of people always smoke after dinner. They felt that it is wonderful after dinner. And they always smoke when they was thinking about. Two, the nicotine. It is a bad thing. It gets into the habit. So, we can not do anything. No, I have some piece of advice to you. Now, how do we do? The warning about the harm of smoking to everyone. No smoking is the public. No advertisement is in the newspaper. And set a smokeless day in the world.