2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

句法知识很棒，若增加一些从句的使用，文章会更出色；文中词汇表达比较丰富，但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。

Nowadays many products have the phenonmenon of excessive packaging.When we dismantle the package,only to find a minor number of things.The followings are the reasons. I think,first,most of the sellers want to sell more products.Because of this attitude,excessive packaging begins overflowing and dues cause severe waste.What's more,the competition among the businessmen can led the phenonment of excessive packaging.At the same,the consumers' psychology also influence it.Many consumers think that excessive packaging may be a sign of expensive present to friends. In my opinion,excessive packaging is a waste of resourse and pollution to environment.It can cause white pollution.So,excessive packaging must be banned and businessmen should produce reasonable packaging products to ensure sustainable development.