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文中词汇表达较恰当,学术词汇表达灵活;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
The catoon describes 'culture' as a pot filled with diversity dishes,which tastes delicious and is full of nourishment. The picture delivers the message that the rich culture is combined with various customs,characters,art,literature,philosophy and so on.Mixing with all the factors,our culture is more abundant and meaningful. As far as I'm concerned,to some extent,what the picture says is significant.It's the collision of disparate cultures that alter and enrich our culture.What's more,the more the culture includes,the more enduring it will be.However the picture presents a somewhat lopsided view of culture.It is obvious that worship of money has a bad effect on culture,which will be worsen if it is advocated.Furthermore,some our precious culture is fading away when we pay more attention to more foreign culture.