2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(54):夏令营活动

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wangshan is a gril who is 16 in the beijingyangguang school.she have many hobbies such as music ,photograph and good at commmunication.there are basically two reasons to partipate the summer camp.on one hand ,it can provide u with a chace to make new frienfs and foreifn culture.what,s more ,she wants to make new friends and love peace and know the foreign culture better .