单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
My hometown is a little city. DaZhou is not have lots of population. Many my friends in the little city ,and writing for me come back from MianYang. And also my family are here,we have a house and a store. My hometown is not famous but there are much delicious food and the citizen is very hot. Come to my hometown ,and you will fell in love with it.