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Nowadays,we often can observe the strange image that many people are failed to make success although most of them were hard to work.That's because all of them were not wise enough?No,the reason why they're failed is that they are put all eggs in one basket. It is said that the concentrate and hard work can bring success.But it is not always be correct.What cause that?I think the reason is very complexing but I can still list the point.First,everything is in changing,nobody can predict what will happen in the next time.So it is important to make a plan B if you want to be successful.Second,the perfect preparation is a vital factor to achieve the plan,and the elaborate steps always as important as the attitude.However,there is few people can handle both of them. In conculsion,it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.So it is necessary to make a plan B and do the well-preperation in order to make success.