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From: Tomsmith@hotmail.com To: John@163.com Date: June 10th. Dear Mr. John Driscoll, I'm the general manager of Sales Department in Fox Electronic Compony. I'm honored on behalf of our compony to inform you that our meeting is shceduled in June 20th. The lanuch date of the new product and advertsing compaign will be discussed then. Please let me know if this would be convenient for you or contact me to offer your arrangement. We are looking forward to setting up a long-term collaboration relationship with you. Best Regards. Tom Smith