2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

正确句子比例较高，适当增加复杂句的使用，文章会更出色；请注意文中用词的丰富度以及单词拼写，学术词汇的希望能更熟练一些；过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富，层次欠清晰。

Nowadays,many products have the phenonmenon of excessive packaging.Often we just find a small number of things inside the excessive packaging.The followings are the reasons. Obviuosly,it is the competition among the businessmen that cause excessive packaging.Most of the sellers believe that the excessive packaging which can attract consumers' attention is a good way to make more profit.Due to this attitude,excessive packaging begins overflowing at the market.However,the most important reason is the mind of the consumers.Excessive packaging products seem to be a sign of luxery.The wrong mind leds a wrong produce. In my opinion,excessive packaging is unnecessary.Even worse,it may cause environment pollution.So excessive packaging must be banned.The businessmen should produce reasonable packaging products.By doing this we can achieve sustained development.