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My views on art education With the development of the economic of society,people life's quality has been well-guaranteed.Based on it,people are gradually paying more attention on art education.Some people hold the view that children need art education from childhood,on the contrary ,others think art education is not necessary for children because the art classes in school are totally enough for us. As far as I am concerned,art education plays an important role in children's growth.The reasons are as below.To begin with , an outstanding student should not only be good at academic study but also learn how to enjoy life.Art education will both give students eyes to find the beauty and some miracle things of life and develop their creativity or imagination in their experts.Secondly,in nowadays our goverment are reforming educational system by adovcating for education for all-around development,which is taking place of traditional stubborn education.Therefore,art education meets the need of pace of refoming educational system.Last but not least ,art education is also aimed at developing human civilization.On the way of developing economic of the society,we'd better also not ignore chasing for high quality of life. To sum up,art education is essential for both children and the society.So,we should call for more and more people highlight the importance of art education.