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With the development of the economy of society,people life's quality has been well-guaranteed.Based on it,more people are gradually paying attention on art education.Some people hold the view that children need art education at their ages,on the contrary ,but still have some people claim that art education is not necessary for children because the school's art classes are totally enough for us. As far as I am concerned,art education plays an important role in children's growth.The reasons are as below.To begin with , an outstanding student should not only be good at study but also learn how to enjoy life.Art education will both give students eyes to find the beauty of life and encourage their creativity in their jobs later.Secondly, nowadays, our goverment are reforming educational system by adovcating for education for all-around development,which is taking place of traditional education.Therefore,art education meets the need of pace of refoming educational system.Last but not least ,art education is also aimed at developing human civilization.On the way of developing economy of the society,we'd better also not ignore chasing for high quality of life. To sum up,art education is essential for both children and the society.And spending money in art is the precondition of advancing health and education.So,we should call for more and more people highlight the importance of art education.