使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;缺少组织,上下文衔接稍显不流畅;作者词汇量积累需要继续努力,尤其学术词汇还有很大提升空间,另外拼写检查还需加强。
Nowadays, with the widely-use of computer, internet is now popular and is affecting our interpeople communication. Internet, brings a lot of webs, for studying, for making friends, for working, etc. More and more people have gone through the convenience and advantge of it. You just need to register with your own username and password, you can then acces to some website to know some other people from worldwide, which, makes the interpersonal communicaton much more easily and quickly. However, everything has two sides. While we are experiencing its advantage, we have to understand its disadvantage. Each website registeration requires personal information input, if internet's safeguard is not steady enough and may easily undergo hacker's strike, people will easily lose their personal informaiton which publiced in website. So interpersonal communication needs a safer internet environment.
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