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Angel and I had decided to invited people to KTVwho are studying in WEB. That was on sunday. After classes, it was around 9 P.M. and 11 people to have fun together. At that time, when we are leaving to take a taxi, one of students said she had a bike and was not envirement to take it, and the improtant was that she did not how to get there. So we walked there and the way was not far away Shimao. We were very excited when we arrived there, but the building has renovating and the KTV is in the minus three floor. We were dissopioted as the room too narrow to move for 10 people. So we changed the biggest one. It seemed the same as the first one which we have booked it. But we did not want to waste time too much and ask waiter to arrange for us. It costed almost 400 RMB. at the begining, every body was shy to show their wonderful voice, for we are not know each other very well. And Angel to sing a song that mede me extrenly surprise. She even could sing a song about folk song. I was very excited that to sing the second one with candy. Time passed qucikly and it was time to say goodbye. We had fun at that time except I broken Bob's glasses.
