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People have a different sports as hobbies in which they find pleasure and satisfaction after long, working day. Some sports may occur weird, strange and dangerous for one while for others can be exciting and worth of trying. From lust for adventure and adrenalin, some people are attracted to different sports like bungee jumping, paragliding or rafting. They are aware of dangers that these unusual sports bring, but adventurous spirit lead them to these activities.
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