题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
作者学术词汇使用比较准确,词汇表达较丰富,但仍需增加词汇积累;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分。
It is with the dramatic development of economy and society that a great number of people who has well financial status purchases their computers which are divided two types,laptop and desktop.Moreover, more and more students who cannot earn sufficient money easily also buy the computers. Why does so many people like to obtain a computer?On the basis of my judgment,three factors are contribute to it.In the first place,we can achieve many conveniences from the computer.For instance,if we have a calculation which is extremely complicated,we can acquire the result by the computer immediately. In the second place,we usually install many games on the computer.Therefore,we can release our pressures by playing games however,we do not play it too long.Otherwise it would waste our energy.In the third place,the computer is an excellent tool in our work and study.We can use the computer to write some compositions,to make some cartoons,to edit some songs and so on. Apparently,we can bestow the computers in many fields.