文章词汇表达多样性不足,不过词汇拼写要再接再厉;建议平时练习中,多多背诵一些好的句子和文章;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
The first,i will show something you can't do ,due to without internet,you can't send and recevie a masseage /mail within 1 minute or less than 1minute,you can't talk to your family,friend.co-worker with vider and you can't handle your bussiness on time......so much "you can". what are mean? that mean our dairy life can't be convinient without internet! even something acopany for example, young penple drop in net refuse communicate with really world,but we need accept:internet is a great thing!