新东方托福高分作文:除了挣钱之外人们工作还为了什么?

作者词汇基础很好，也能较灵活使用学术词汇，望继续努力；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。

Works not only generate employment opportunities but also give people sense of achievement and also enable us to make our own contribution to this society. To be honest, money is an essential ingredient for a better live. But we might get at loss for if we only work for money. In my perspective, nobody can live purely on money without any mental enjoyment. And it's not necessary, neither. We could afford a lower payment but higher satisfaction occupation. On the one hand, many seize happiness for devoting to their favorite areas. Usually we have a variety of interests. Why not develop our habits into our career? When we do the job we really enjoy, we can easily gather momentum to overcome any problem we are confronted with. Meanwhile, we will never fell exhausted and frustrated, because that's our true love. In this case, we gain more fulfillment than money. For example, when my father was still a basketball couch in senior high school, he accompanied his team to win the championship of province university basketball competition. He told me that a time he will never forget. Even though it's very tiring. Training with them all the time and chatting with them to make them relaxed. But he says that the work is worthwhile. Therefore he always guides me to do what I really want. Work can also provide us with a chance to make our contribution to this society. As a citizen of this society, I can help to being grateful for everything around me. My father and grandfather were live in serious poverty. So they always teach me to treasure this peaceful and prosperous society. Moreover we can be touched every day for our national cohesion and really want to do something for our country. For example, when the earthquake of WENCHUAN Sichuang, every body feel the pain in our heart. Donation comes from every part of China and so does the supporting strength. I really appreciate a saying that when everyone does a better job, then actually, we are make big difference for our society. Admittedly, money is a key reason for why people work. But if we attribute every motivation of people's desire of working to money. We can never be convincing. As the development of society more and more emphasis on mental rather than physical. We can expect more from our life long occupation.