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Since 2010, there are plenty of violences happened in some schools. At the beginning, people were very surprised, but after that we fall in a deep thinking about these things: how can we stop these things happened? First of all, as a student, we need to learn how to protect ourselves and be attention of our behavior.Secondly, we should make some friends who is kind ,gentle and nice.We can't make friends with those people who doesn't study, bad behavior and rude. Last but not least, we should follow the school rules and find the school's security guard at once if you or other one else get in these troubles. To sum up, we should pay attention campus violences, not only school but also society. We need to build a friendly environment and atmosphere in school.