2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(54):夏令营活动

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wangshan is a a gril of 16 in the beijing at beijing Sunshine Secondary School.she have many hobbies such as love music ,photography and good at communication .when people are in trouble ,she always help people who are in ineed.she love peacea nd nature.in order to help people and make more friends .at the same time ,learn much more the foreign culture.she alwaus think what,s special about this country is her colourful culture.