GRE写作Issue模拟题8:Pursuing One's Ideals

文中能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇，但词汇表达多样性不高，拼写检查还需加强；采用了一些简单的从句；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少；请注意分段。

许多人认为一些个人或小群体(例如,家人、朋友、老师、名人)造成了他们的思维和行为的方式。但它总是社会作为一个整体,它定义了我们和我们的态度,而不是少数人。” it is well known that society as a whole that defines us and our attitudes and it palys an important role in both our life and work.we try do better than others in our study and work ,and there is constant competition for fame and wealth in life in order to affect the other people . in the meantime,societyas a whole is also necesssary because most work is accomplished with or through other people,without which socirty cannot keep going spmoothly.let,s take a footable game for example.if indivuals only want to lead a happy and rich life of their life and don,t care about other people life.they may be social blam at last