希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;简单句有点多,从句数量使用不足;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Today,a new teacher come to our class.She is an English teacher. She is very kind,and friendly.She is 28 years old,just like a student. She has long blond hair,big blue eyes.She is tall,and thin.We think she is the most beautiful teacher in our school. On the first class,she says:''My name is Maria,I come from England.I hope we can learn English well together,and I also hope you can like me.''We all laugh,and say:''Yes!'' On her class,we all very active,she often makes face to us.we all very happy. We like her very much!