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As we all know,china is beautiful country,which fills of many interesting cities.I live in a city,which is the one of the most beautiful cities.It is located in the south of china,which named as Jieyang.There are many senses in my city.Such as Jieyang town,a centre building,with a large playground.Another famous sense is Huangqi mountain,which locate in the north of the city.It is the highest one from what I have known.Besides,When you go to the mountain,you will see many trees and some special rocks in your eyes. It will be an unforgettable experience to you.Welcome to visit my hometown,I will take you to the sense what I have talk above.By no means can we not enjoy it.
