2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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Dear jack: The winter is coming.I would like to invite you to my hometown.My hometown is beautiful,I think you will have a good time with me.YunFeng Mountain is the most interesting in my hometown.It has lots of green trees and the air is fresh.Having a tower on it.so you can have a good view of the mountain.When it snows,the mountain is covered ,it will become beautifui. I'm looking forward to your reply. Your friend longhui