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Nowadays, there is a hot debate on whether competition or cooperation is more important? As for such a issue, opinions vary from individual to individual. Quite a few people hold a belief that cooperation is more of important than cooperation. They think that cooperation can make them more successful. While there are some people disagree with it. They maintain that cooperation is less important than competition. They says that competition stimulates people sucessful. From my point of view, i'm absolutely in favor of the former view. The reasons that support my opinion can be severed in several accepts as follows. The first fact that can support my view is that there is an old saying in China "All the people can make big fire. " Clearly, it tells us that cooperation likes union. It is energy. By cooperation, we can make progress. Another famous saying also can back my opinion. It is "One chip stock can cut easily, but a pile of chip stocks can not cut easily. In real life, it's like this, one man can't obtain more achievement than lots of people who are cooperative. This saying is indicated that cooperation is of great important. In addition, some people who always want to compete with others can hardly achieve success. Because they don't want to cooperate with others, and others won't help them when they face up with challenges. Thus, from what have been discussed above, we can draw such a natural conclusion that cooperation is really important than competition. And we should not underestimate cooperation. Through cooperation, we can get good grades in our work, and we can perform better.
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