拼写做的很棒,学术词汇可适量增加;作者句法知识扎实,但文中从句数量稍显不足;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Living in the digital age, we are unavoidably exposed to all kinds of digital products, such as digital camera, digital computer, digital television, and so on. Believe it or not, look around yourself and you can easily find one or two of these stuffs. The digital products bring great influence to people’s life. Frankly speaking, these modern digital products offer us a more convenient life than before. For example, the digital camera makes it possible to delete or correct the “unsuccessful” photo of ours, which was impossible with the traditional camera. While, unfortunately, these fashionable digital items are making our real life isolated . It is hard to imagine that a man so accustomed to the digital mobile on-line chatting can be capable of the practical communication with others. Finally, too much dependent on the digital things, human seem to be more indifferent to the real world. Thus, some effective measures should be taken to avoid the negative effects. Don’t forget those old days when you were going to visit an old school friend though there would be a long train journey. The on-line life never be better than the real life.