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last week,i interviewed the psychology professer Kelly Lam.I want to consult him something about Chinese students' view of sharing. He told me no matter the happy and sad,more than thirty percent of students don't like to share with others and our chirdren can konw nothing about the importance of share.In his opinion,learning share feelings is very important in the period we live in.And we should learn how to express our feelings properly,all of those are benificial to ourselves.