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From:Wanghaiyang@hotmail.com,Date:Dec.23th.13pm Wang Haiyang To:Sales-department@hotmail.com,Mr.Johnson Subject:We have received your company 3000 pieces production at Dec.22th. But according to our signing of the No.35 order,Production number should be 3500 pieces, other 500 pieces we have not received until now.Please check your product list,we are looking forward to your early repiy.your sincerely.Wang Haiyang