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From:Wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date:December 23 rd, 2008 To:sales-department@hotmail.com Subject:Dear Mr.Johnson,To check out product list We have received your company 3,000 productions on December 22nd,but according to our signing of the No.35 order,we should be receive 3,500 productions,the other 500 productions we have not received so far.Please check your product list,we are looking forward to your reply,yours faithfully.Wang Hai Yang