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The Dragon Boat Festival China,one of the most oldest country in the world,has a 5000-year history. There are a great number of traditional festival in China.The Dragon Boat Festival is one of the most important one. Why people celebrate the day? There was a great poet in Chinese history.Quyuan was a loyal official in Chu dynasty.He loved his country.In order to present his loyal,he jumped into the river. The story moved Chinese a lot. So Chinese people celebrate the day to memory Quyuan. How people observe the festival? Usually, people will hold Dragon Boat Games and catch ducks in the river.Zongzi is the most popular food during that day.Different Zongzi have different taste.As for me, eating Zongzi is my favorite way to observe the festival.I especially love sweet Zongzi.What's more, people will hang some special grass on the door to keep the ghost away. Traditional Chinese festival is a good mirror to present Chinese culture.The Dragon Boat Festival is one of them.