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I have a good friend and she is 27 years old now.We are know each other over 10 years.That's a long time to us. At 10 years ago.She had a short hair when I knew her and her's behavior just like a boy.It give me a deep impression. She is so pretty and everyone likes her even some boys wants to make friends with her. She have a long black hair,big eyes,small nose and little mouth.She like do some exercise. Basketball and swimming is her favorite.Especially she like to walking after dinner.It's good for health, She like singing but she don't good at it.I have to admit it. That can not stop her passion. Time passed quickly.Some people was changed but our friendship.I believe it.