拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Nowadays,The internet play an increasingly essential role in our life.With the development of the internet there are some different opinions.Some people argue that the internet not only make student effective study but also broaden our perspective.What's more,it also improves work efficient.However,there exist opposite views.They think that the young will be addicted to internet instead of studying result from the grades become more and more worse. According to me,As is known to us.Everything has two sides.The key is that how to use it rightly?We could learn about all kinds of the latest news.We can also study many things that we can't acquire from the text. In a word,The internet is only a tool.It is of importance for us to how to make use of it?