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With the developed of the social,many forest has been destroy. The one of the most important reason is that the use of Disposal Bags.According to the study of international,one tree can only be made of one thousand chopsticks,the use of Disposal Bags can also pollute the environment. Because the wide use of the Disposal Bags. The white pollution has begin form the widest pollution. Wherever you are,you can see the white pollution.It effect our normal life,our healthy.As far as I am concerned,limiting the use of disposal bags has been the most important things.I hope the Government will take some actions to limiting the use of Disposal Bags to make us healthy,if we do that, our life will be very good!