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A new tacher came to our class today.I am very happy because she is beautiful and kindful. Her name ias Mary. she is tall. Her hair is red,her eyes is black.She teach us English.She always smile to us in her class.Her voice is clear that I can understand what she said .I think I like the new teacher.