文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但学术词汇稍显不足;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Take care of ourselves! Chinese Education Ministry has paid close attention to self-protection education among school students because some knowledge about self-protection may help one survive in case of emergency. In my opinion, no lesson is more important than the one on personal safety. Life is fragile but can be strengthened when one is armed with enough knowledge on how to protect oneself from danger. As middle school students, we should learn some knowledge about safety. Firstly, we should always obey the traffic rules. When we go across the road, we must wait for the green light. When we go to school or go home by bike, we should go along the right side and should not ride at a high speed. Secondly, in order to avoid fire in our dormitory, we should not use any electric device without permission. Thirdly, we should not climb the fence of the school in case that we might hurt ourselves. It is high time that we should be aware of the importance of self-protection. And only with a good sense of self-protection can we live a safe and happy life!