作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
My favorite sport Even though there are a lot of sports around the world and they are good,I like soccer best. Believe it or not,I love soccer by accident.on the day,I pick up a soccer ball on the road and play with my friends.And then I fall in love with the sport.Playing soccer is extremely fun.Once you played it,you will not give up it.What a magic it is!After that day,I often play soccer with my friend and take part in some competitions. My favorite soccer ball player is beckham.He is a man which comes from England.I dream to be a a professional football player in the future.