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Hi, I'm glad you come to visit my hometown . And it is my pleasure to show you somewhere interesting of my hometown. My hometown is a small village. There is surrounded by mountains. Small river is flowing through the village. In our village,there is a well ,feeding the whole village with a long history.The water is warm in winter and cool in summer,clear,even you can see in the bottom. Here abounds ''Guozi'',a kind of fruits,sweet and a little sour.That is bliss. There are also something good waiting you for discover. I am look forward to your coming.