2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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A beautiful City in China If a foreigner friend go to visit my hometown,I will take him to see the sea that is so beautiful and blue,feel the fresh and cool wind.It is so comfortable.Then I prefer to have picnic with him,we can catch some fishes and cook it.Some farm provide cook-self service.After having the delicious food,I will show him around the temple where near by my hometown.The temple stand in a hill,we can cilmb and walk in it.I want to let him feel the nature and construction style of China.