文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;简单句偏多了;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
my . favorite sports i am a sport's lover.i liked play soccer by chance.in my way hom,.i picked up an old soccer.i was so surprised that i played soccer with my friends happily. i loved soccer after this.i fell in love with it deeply.i always train it with my friends.now i think that football is my life. my favorite football star is Baker Ham.He plays football well.Now my biggest dream is that i want to be a professional football player.