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My Favorite Sports Iam a sport's lover.I liked play soccer by chance.In my way home,I picked up an old soccer.I was so surprised that I played soccer with my friends happily. I loved soccer after this.I fell in love with it deeply.I always train it with my friends.now I think that football is my life. My favorite football star is Baker Ham.He plays football well.Now my biggest dream is that I want to be a professional football player.